All Loved Up
Poetry by S. Bee... This cleverly written, sweet story in rhyme was chosen Editor's Choice. Once you read it, you'll know why ....
ALL LOVED UP – She said
Hey- guess what? I’ve packed my case
We’ve moved into our very own place
A couple’s space- it’s rather swish
A trial for marriage is what I wish
Four weeks on - it’s a state of bliss
Cuddles galore and a passionate kiss
There’s his smelly socks on the floor
But I really couldn’t ask for more
Three months in, and he gets on my wick
When he slurps his tea, I want to be sick
I thought I loved him like no other
Just don’t ask me about his mother!
His mates come round and the parties are loud
Why does he need such a big crowd?
It’s not my scene, so I’m off to bed
Recall the loving words he said
Six months on, and things are tense
He still hasn’t fixed the garden fence
Crisp bits everywhere, always on the phone
Football on telly - then there’s that loan…
He never stops snoring at night
I’m so fed- up of all these fights
If he shouts at me again like that
I’ll walk out, and never come back
He says I’m a nagging moaner
Well, he is one god- awful groaner!
All these rows make me sad
I wish I’d stayed at mum and dad’s
That leak wants fixing, he always forgets
Like us two, damaged by neglect
All loved up, together forever...
Now we simply discuss the weather
Splitting up will break my heart
I just can’t bear to be apart
We need to sit down and talk
It’s better than going for a walk
Success! Our love stood the test of time
Proud and happy because he is mine
He’s even got down on his knee
And said “Hey, will you marry me?”
ALL LOVED UP – He said
Been seeing her now for quite a while
A good- looking lass with a winning smile
Then I suggest finding a home
It’s good to be no longer alone
My mates say I’m taking a chance
Yet why not grab this sweet romance?
A shared hang out; a little love nest
I reckon she’s the best of the best
So I like a booze -up or two
Come on, join in, don’t be blue!
She’s stormed off in a sulk, no sense of fun
Why does she dislike visiting my mum?
Housework tasks? Oh stuff that
I like my own way, here in this flat
I’m fed- up of your belly –aching
This situation is of your own making!
Hush please now, the football’s on
There’s the phone - it’s my mate John
Grocery’s shopping’s such a faff
She’s upset – crisps in the bath
With socks and snoring, the rot’s set in
Fixing fences ain’t my thing
So I slurp my daily cuppa
I could easily find another lover
I’ve a loan? Well, it’s no big deal
I can’t be arsed to make nice meals
She’s hyped up, a big control freak
And yes, I know all about the leak
Six months later, I’m ready to leave
Yet her tears stop me “Darling, please”
I don’t want to throw our love away
I hold her close and decide to stay
I know I’ve been a selfish fella
I say sorry and the mood is better
We make an effort every day
Things are done in a different way
I’m glad she’s here, in my life
So I ask her to be my wife
The boozy nights are now all gone
But my best man has got to be John.
This poem was many things! Heartbreaking, funny, realistic, and maybe even relatable to some. I especially love how it has both partners’ point of view!
This is pretty funny -- and realistic I fear. Good how you created rhyming.