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Wayne Paul Mattingly's avatar

I don't mean to be unkind but: You write, "I can only see his back..." but open the piece by writing "I stare back at the man in front of me." Does this imply that his head is twisted, horror-style, behind him? ... "Even it meant..." I guess I'm supposed to insert the 'if' ie: "Even if it meant..." .."his breathes" This is a piece of flash fiction, no? Three short paragraphs. My point is there are far too many typos, errors, etc that should have been corrected by the editors. Seriously. I would like to learn more about the action that took place in the second line.

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