🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 A beautifully written story that draws you into a magical moment between two strangers united by a butterfly chase. Shani and Zoran's connection feels authentic, with tender and spontaneous interactions that warm the heart. The author captures the wonder of chance encounters and the beauty of unexpected romance. A captivating, heartfelt read that lingers with you!
Thank you so much. It's really really encouraging since I have been getting a lot of rejections. I would also like some weak points if you don't mind. It will help me a lot.
Hi! First of all, I just wanted to say how much I enjoyed reading your story! It’s full of charm and has such a lovely, whimsical feel to it. 😊
One thing I wanted to mention—while the flow of the story is wonderful, I noticed that the pacing might benefit from a little bit of slowing down, especially between the initial encounter and the kiss. The transitions happen quickly, and I think with just a bit more build-up or descriptive moments, you could really deepen the connection between the characters. This would allow the reader to feel more engaged in their emotions and interactions. Slowing things down a bit could help build some anticipation and make their moment together feel even more meaningful.
I hope this feedback is helpful! Again, I really enjoyed the story and can’t wait to see how you continue to develop your characters.
I agree with Emmanuelle… this is a story that can be developed into something more….the characters have such good chemistry it would be nice to see more interaction between them….😁
🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 A beautifully written story that draws you into a magical moment between two strangers united by a butterfly chase. Shani and Zoran's connection feels authentic, with tender and spontaneous interactions that warm the heart. The author captures the wonder of chance encounters and the beauty of unexpected romance. A captivating, heartfelt read that lingers with you!
Thank you so much. It's really really encouraging since I have been getting a lot of rejections. I would also like some weak points if you don't mind. It will help me a lot.
Thank you so much again ❤️❤️
Hi! First of all, I just wanted to say how much I enjoyed reading your story! It’s full of charm and has such a lovely, whimsical feel to it. 😊
One thing I wanted to mention—while the flow of the story is wonderful, I noticed that the pacing might benefit from a little bit of slowing down, especially between the initial encounter and the kiss. The transitions happen quickly, and I think with just a bit more build-up or descriptive moments, you could really deepen the connection between the characters. This would allow the reader to feel more engaged in their emotions and interactions. Slowing things down a bit could help build some anticipation and make their moment together feel even more meaningful.
I hope this feedback is helpful! Again, I really enjoyed the story and can’t wait to see how you continue to develop your characters.
Wishing you all the best with your writing! 😊
Thank you so much for constructive feedback.
Points noticed.
I will try my best next time
I agree with Emmanuelle… this is a story that can be developed into something more….the characters have such good chemistry it would be nice to see more interaction between them….😁
I will do my best and grow better with help of you and cool writers here. Trying my best to write better pieces
Sweet!
Thank you so much 😊❤️❤️❤️❤️